What's wrong is that it is the mother's story. The mother's story is all back story. It is not the story I want to tell. And my story has been fighting me. Like duh!!
This revelation happened yesterday when I realized that my setting pictures below my 'magical shelf" was not my setting now. The story had changed. So began the process of discovery for the story I'm writing. Below is my new setting.
Then I realized that the board for the people in my story was also horribly wrong. The light bulb, it was the mother's story. Not the daughter's. So I changed that as well.
Oh gods, yes. That is Jacob from the 'Twilight' saga. Samil is dark and he was the only actor I could think of that had the dark coloring. Okay, I lie. He really does it for me and I think Bella was a total fool. Just saying!!
Here's the total package. It is what I see as I write. Love it.
The little lizard is my vestigial tail. In the original story he played a part, and I just can't bring myself to make him go away. So he stays. Maybe he's right and he is important. Maybe not.